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This looks delicious, and the drawing ain't bad either. But, in all seriousness, this looks really good. I would recommend for the diff...


This is a really beautiful piece. I don't know how you did it, but it almost looks like a photograph with how realistic it is. All the ...


You did a really good job with this piece. It looks so much like the character herself, yet you put your own spin on the design to help...


This is a very good piece overall. I like the kind of choppy style you used for some of the environment and the character, ut you shoul...

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So, I'm going to be writing a crossover with Gravity Falls, and Mr. Enter's Growing Around. I'm just nervous of posting it on Deviantart, since a lot of crazy Enter haters are on this site.
This looks delicious, and the drawing ain't bad either. But, in all seriousness, this looks really good. I would recommend for the different colors of the ice creams, you can add something in them for a little more detail. For instance, you can ass chocolate chips in the green one. Mint chocolate chip is my favorite. But, back to your piece. The OC looks really nice, and it's interesting to see her not happy being in a shit ton of ice cream. Other than that, the piece looks great, but what are those stick things on the right? Keep up the good work.
The Choices (Review)
 
     Why does everyone like this episode so much? I…don’t get it. I mean, if you like it, that’s fine, but I really don’t see what’s so special about it. So, the
plot of this episode is that Nicole goes through a ‘It’s a Wonderful Life’ plot, discussing her relationship with Richard. A lot of people, even Mr. Enter, really love this episode. But me personally, I don’t see it.
First, I just want to say something; I really hate this trope. OK, that’s not true, I just hate the way it’s been portrayed. The worst example is “It’s a Wishful Life”, obviously, and this episode is nowhere near as bad. But, most of these It’s a Wonderful Life plots always do stuff wrong. In fact, the best It’s a Wonderful Life story I saw was on an episode of iCarly. We’ll come back to that, but let’s start talking about the episode

    So, this episode starts with the kids annoying Nicole, and we’ve hit our first major problem. These it’s a Wonderful Life stories are supposed to, in my mind, teach the person going through the adventure a lesson that they will never know what they have until it’s gone. In that episode of iCarly, Spencer accidently caused a fire, and Carly yells at him, and wishes that he was normal. On the other hand, Nicole’s kids were being annoying, and destroying things without even feeling sorry for it. After snapping, Nicole then goes through the day she met Richard.

By the way, I don’t really…get the joke with Nicole’s report card. If they care so much about grades, I doubt they would even look at her gender. By the way, gender isn’t shown on report cards, at least the ones I’ve seen. I think it’d be funnier if they were complaining about an A- or something. Then, Nicole runs out of the car to make it to a karate tournament, and sees Richard stuck in a log.

So then we see some alternative futures for Nicole, which involve her becoming the mayor and people cheering upon her death, being in a marriage based on her new husband singing an annoying song, and Richard becoming basically Stone Cold Steve Austin.

OK so he’s not a wifebeater, but he’s an egotistical asshole. That ends with Nicole burning down their house, which was…kind of funny, I’ll admit

Back to iCarly. When she went into her new life, there were both positives and negatives, not just negatives. Nicole being the victim of only negative endings makes it seem like she’s only accepting Richard just so that she could have the best possible outcome. At least in iCarly, Carly had some good incentive to stay in the alternate reality.

The end of the episode comes when Nicole comes back, and instead of a heart warming hug or something, the kids start a food fight, and Nicole just…joins them. In the iCarly episode, after Carly comes back, she, Spencer, and her friends hum a Christmas Carol in a moment of togetherness.

Are there any positives? Well, we get to see some of Nicole’s past, which is nice and the ending of the “Richards an Asshole” sketch was funny to me. Overall, it isn’t terrible, or even bad. It’s just…meh. I think it’s over hyped. I don’t know why people love this episode. But hey, if you like it, that’s great. I’m not trying to change your opinion, I’m just stating mine.

I wouldn’t even consider this episode an atrocity. Like I said, it’s just overhyped. I mean, there are much more emotional things to watch, like the Gravity Falls finale, the Ed Edd n Eddy movie, etc. But, this is just…not really emotional; I think it’s kind of stupid. But hey, you can like whatever. Now that I’ve said my piece, I’m going to go back at laughing at Tara Strong’s performance of Cindy from the Boondocks. Not because it’s bad, but it is so funny to watch a Canadian trying to act Gangster. I’m the Maniac, and I’m out.
Is YouTube being a dick to anyone else? Whenever I try and go on YouTube on my phone, it just keeps saying "an error occurred while performing this operation". Is anyone else going through this, or is it just me?
Do any of you guys have any predictions for the Royal Rumble? Here are mine;

Kevin Owens retains his title
AJ Styles retains his title
Neville wins the title
Charlotte retains her title
Chris Jericho wins the Royal Rumble

Let me know if you guys have any.
The Choices (Review)
 
     Why does everyone like this episode so much? I…don’t get it. I mean, if you like it, that’s fine, but I really don’t see what’s so special about it. So, the
plot of this episode is that Nicole goes through a ‘It’s a Wonderful Life’ plot, discussing her relationship with Richard. A lot of people, even Mr. Enter, really love this episode. But me personally, I don’t see it.
First, I just want to say something; I really hate this trope. OK, that’s not true, I just hate the way it’s been portrayed. The worst example is “It’s a Wishful Life”, obviously, and this episode is nowhere near as bad. But, most of these It’s a Wonderful Life plots always do stuff wrong. In fact, the best It’s a Wonderful Life story I saw was on an episode of iCarly. We’ll come back to that, but let’s start talking about the episode

    So, this episode starts with the kids annoying Nicole, and we’ve hit our first major problem. These it’s a Wonderful Life stories are supposed to, in my mind, teach the person going through the adventure a lesson that they will never know what they have until it’s gone. In that episode of iCarly, Spencer accidently caused a fire, and Carly yells at him, and wishes that he was normal. On the other hand, Nicole’s kids were being annoying, and destroying things without even feeling sorry for it. After snapping, Nicole then goes through the day she met Richard.

By the way, I don’t really…get the joke with Nicole’s report card. If they care so much about grades, I doubt they would even look at her gender. By the way, gender isn’t shown on report cards, at least the ones I’ve seen. I think it’d be funnier if they were complaining about an A- or something. Then, Nicole runs out of the car to make it to a karate tournament, and sees Richard stuck in a log.

So then we see some alternative futures for Nicole, which involve her becoming the mayor and people cheering upon her death, being in a marriage based on her new husband singing an annoying song, and Richard becoming basically Stone Cold Steve Austin.

OK so he’s not a wifebeater, but he’s an egotistical asshole. That ends with Nicole burning down their house, which was…kind of funny, I’ll admit

Back to iCarly. When she went into her new life, there were both positives and negatives, not just negatives. Nicole being the victim of only negative endings makes it seem like she’s only accepting Richard just so that she could have the best possible outcome. At least in iCarly, Carly had some good incentive to stay in the alternate reality.

The end of the episode comes when Nicole comes back, and instead of a heart warming hug or something, the kids start a food fight, and Nicole just…joins them. In the iCarly episode, after Carly comes back, she, Spencer, and her friends hum a Christmas Carol in a moment of togetherness.

Are there any positives? Well, we get to see some of Nicole’s past, which is nice and the ending of the “Richards an Asshole” sketch was funny to me. Overall, it isn’t terrible, or even bad. It’s just…meh. I think it’s over hyped. I don’t know why people love this episode. But hey, if you like it, that’s great. I’m not trying to change your opinion, I’m just stating mine.

I wouldn’t even consider this episode an atrocity. Like I said, it’s just overhyped. I mean, there are much more emotional things to watch, like the Gravity Falls finale, the Ed Edd n Eddy movie, etc. But, this is just…not really emotional; I think it’s kind of stupid. But hey, you can like whatever. Now that I’ve said my piece, I’m going to go back at laughing at Tara Strong’s performance of Cindy from the Boondocks. Not because it’s bad, but it is so funny to watch a Canadian trying to act Gangster. I’m the Maniac, and I’m out.

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