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Adventures of Alice 2: The Power of Belief
Adventures of Alice 2: The Power of Belief
   Alice was sitting in the playground near her home, with Iris watching her from a nearby bench. Alice was quite popular with the kids at the playground, due to the other kids thinking Iris was cool, and them liking Alice doing things that teenagers do, like playing M rated games and watching M rated movies. She was in a circle of other children, where they usually talked about things they liked. The topic for today? Animals! More specifically, their favorite animals.
“Dinosaurs are cool! They eat people and are big and strong!” the black haired boy in the middle of the circle expressed loudly. A lot of the other boys agreed with him, but a couple shook their heads.
“Nuh uh, Randy. Doggies are cooler! They’re nice and my doggy gives me rides!” a blonde haired boy argued. Everyone in the circle, except Randy, ‘oohed’ and ‘ahhed’.
“Dinosaurs can give rides too, Dummy D
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Literature
You Just Made the List
You shouldn't have done that
Now I am supremely pissed
You know what happens to people who make me angry?
Well, you do now...cause YOU JUST MADE THE LIST!
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Dirty Little Secret
Dirty Little Secret
Tina was writing some more of her erotic friend fictions, before her pencil broke. Then, she looked into her pencil bag to get a spare pencil, before she realized that there was a pencil missing. Tine began freaking out and hyperventilating before she remembered that Louise had her spare pencil. Tina calmed down, and got up from her chair to go to Louise’s room.
Tina knocked on Louise’s door, and didn’t hear her come to the door, but heard some moaning from the other side of the door. Tina then opened the door, and saw…


…Louise kissing a Seth Rollins poster. When Louise heard the door opening and saw Tina standing on the other side of the door, Louise shrieked, and slipped off of her bed.
“Louise! Are you OK?” Tina asked, before Louise got up while rubbing her head. Louise then remembered what she was doing a couple of seconds ago, and tried to hide it with her hands.
“Look Tina, this…isn
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Louise's Little Friend (Chapter 2)
Louise's Little Friend (Chapter 2)
Louise was racking her brain for a way to hide Misako. If her dad found it, then her new friend would most certainly be dead. Louise then puts Misako close to her face. "OK, get into my hat and don't let my Dad see you," Louise whispered to Misako before putting it into her hat. Louise then jumps down from the attic, and is confronted by her father. "Louise, did you find the rat?" Bob asked while holding a metal ladle, looking like he wants to hit something with it. Louise gulped before putting a hand behind her head.
"Uhh…no, I didn't see it. It…must have escaped," Louise answered. Bob looked at Louise for a second before shrugging his shoulders. "Well, at least it's gone, and we don't have to worry it again," Bob said. As he was about to walk away, he then noticed Misako sitting underneath Louise's hat. "Uhh…Louise, why do you have a bump on you head?" Bob asked while pointing at Misako. Louise then straightened her back bef
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Louise's Little Friend (Chapter 1)
Louise's Little Friend (Chapter 1)
    Bob was wandering around the restaurant with a colander on his head and a wooden spoon in his hands. Gene, and Louise were looking at them with suspicion and curiosity. "Uh, Dad, Halloween isn't for another 6 months. Why are you dressed like that?" Louise asked in a joking manner. "OH MY GOD! It's Halloween already? Why didn't anyone tell me?" Gene said as he was about to rocket upstairs to make a costume. "Gene, it's not Halloween," Bob told Gene, which caused Gene to go back to his seat disappointingly.
    "So, why are you dressed up?" Gene asked. "It's because mom and dad are chasing a rat that they found earlier today," Tina said, coming from upstairs. "Tina! How'd you know that?" Bob asked. He told Linda not to tell the children just in case they freaked out like he was. "Mom told me while she was crawling around upstairs," Tina answered. "That's what's got you freaked out? Why do you care about a rat bei
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Inappropriate Fireworks
Inappropriate Fireworks
Linda was heading home from school when she saw her neighbor, Mr. Jackson, bringing out fireworks. It wasn’t the 4th of July, or any other holiday where you bring fireworks out. Linda decided to go investigate, and went up to Mr. Jackson.
“Uh, Mr. Jackson, what are you doing with all those fireworks?” Linda asked. Mr. Jackson wasn’t usually one to do something this unusual, and it worried Linda.
“Oh nothing, Linda, it’s just that it’s Groundhog Day, and I decided to celebrate,” Mr. Jackson answered while loading up the last of his fireworks.
“Why are you celebrating Groundhog Day with fireworks?” Linda asked, knowing that Groundhog Day was a boring holiday, and defiantly not something worthy of a fireworks show.
“Well, I love groundhogs, and I don’t think they get enough respect. I mean, they can dictate how long winter’s gonna be with just the appearance of their shadows! So, I though
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Starting Over
Starting Over
Candy was looking at the door to the Mystery Shack with a wave of sadness overtaking her. She felt like she had ruined a once in a lifetime opportunity by losing her nerve and just saying the first thing that came into her mind. She and Mabel were now sitting outside of the Mystery Shack as Mabel tried to console her friend. "Dipper probably thinks I am a freak now," Candy said in a forlorn tone. Mabel gasped loudly and looked Candy straight in the eye. "You're not a freak Candy! Like you said, you came off a little too strongly. I have that problem too. I'm sure if you just talk to him, it'll be fine," Mabel said, trying to make her feel better.
Candy looked up at Mabel, unsure of that would work. "I do not think that will work, Mabel. I think I may have screwed things up," Candy said before getting up to go back home. But before she could get too far, Mabel grabbed her from behind and threw her down to the ground, and keeping her arms on the ground so that she couldn't
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Grand Theft Pizza
Grand Theft Pizza
A guy sat down at his local pizza place. The pizza place was inside a giant mall, and right in front of the food court. This guy, named Richard, who was wearing a dark blue suit and tie, and a ponytail, put his pizza down on the floor before heading to the condiments table to get some napkins. When he did, he walked back to his table, and saw something he never thought he’d see…



…HIMSELF!
Richard stared, mouth agape, as he was looking into an identical version of himself. He put his hand out, and the other Richard did the same thing. Richard put his other hand out, and he was copied by the other Richard. Richard then flipped off the other Richard, and the other Richard did the same thing.
“Who…who are you?” Richard asked, before the other Richard patted him on the shoulder, and took a bite out of his pizza.
“I’m you from a week into the future. I was testing out the new time machine I invented,
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Burning Desire
Burning Desire
Dipper sat in front of the Mystery Shack with a forlorn look on his face. He had been like this since they came back from their road trip. He had been asked on a date by one of Mabel's friend, Candy. He didn't really think of her that way, but said yes anyway to avoid hurting her feelings. When they went on the actual date, Dipper was shocked at how much they had in common; they both liked anime, they both listened to Panic! At the Disco, they both watched the Nostalgia Critic, etc. Dipper then slowly began to fall for her throughout their date.
Before Dipper could tell her, some girls he had talked to earlier came by. When they confronted Dipper, he admitted to them that he was trying to get good at talking girls. However, Candy assumed that he was talking about her as well, and thought that he was 'practicing for Wendy', and was angry about it. Dipper tried to explain everything, but Candy ignored him. Even after they fought the giant spider, Candy still wouldn'
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A Little Too Strong
A Little Too Strong
Candy was with Mabel, as Mabel had invited her over to hang out. Candy was by herself as her other friend, Grenda was sick with the flu. She, however, was not paying attention to anything that they were doing. She was hiding behind a tree, and watching Dipper from afar. She had heard of all of Dipper's adventures from Mabel, and that just amazed her. That amazement eventually grew into a crush, and she had been spending every moment she could at the Mystery Shack just to see Dipper. Right now, Dipper was reading while listening to music coming from his headphones. Just then, Mabel came back with a pile of shiny rocks.
"Candy, look at these we found by the pond!" Mabel said excitedly as she shoved the rocks in Candy's face. "Oh…that is…uh…great Mabel," Candy said pretending to pay attention to what she said. Mabel frowned a little bit at Candy not paying attention to her 'discovery'. "I also climbed up a tree and it was awesome! I could see a
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Growing Wierder (Chapter 1)
Growing Weirder
Dipper was downstairs in the basement, cleaning the lab while Grunkle Ford was getting some food. Dipper was excited, because when Grunkle Ford got back, they were going to test out the new portal they created. This portal, according to Ford could take them anywhere in the known world and the unknown world…or could burn them to a painful crisp. It was a risk Dipper was willing to take. Just when he was done dusting some of the test tubes, he heard the door being kicked open, knowing immediately who was there.
“HEY DIPPER!” Mabel yelled from the top of the stairs. Dipper looked at Mabel, and rolled his eyes in an annoyed tone.
“Hi Mabel. What have I told you about interrupting me when I’m working down here?” Dipper asked, sounding quite annoyed.
“I don’t think being Grunkle Ford’s maid counts as ‘working’. Plus, I want to see what new things you two invented,” Mabel countered and then explaine
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These are the cartoon/anime characters I would want to have as my friends;

Louise Belcher, Mabel Pines, Madison from Class of 3000, the Eds, Sheen, Natsu, Tooru, and Homer Simpson.
Tokyo's Black Bullet is getting more popular! Two chapters have gotten favorites today. Check out the story in my gallery. Hopefully, it WILL become a novel.
Peach Girl: Dumb! Stupid! Moronic! So, here's the plot; a girl pretends to be friends with this other girl to spread rumors about her. OK, so why be friends with her? You don't need to be friends with someone to spread shit about them. All you need is their name. Also, is the entire school made of idiots, that they would believe something like this. Also, why doesn't the victim do anything? It also looks really ugly to me, and makes me hate romantic stuff. All the characters are one note, and some of them are named after characters in Evangelion.

Michiko to Hatchin: The plot goes from A to B to B to B to B to B to B to C. They have some development in the first couple of episodes, but forget about that completely for 24 episodes, and is turned into a glorified babysitting comedy, even with the horrendous abuse one of the characters suffered. The ending is also shit. I don't want to spoil it, but...it makes the entre adventure pointless.

Pani Poni Dash: It's OK for the first two episodes, but the characters grate on you, and they do the same thing in every episode; "Hey! Look at these different personalities! Look at them argue! Isn't it hilarious!? Well, we hope you think so, because EVERY episode is like this!" Also, the theme song is annoyingly trippy. And, there's an ugly looking bunny that is basically the Meg Griffin of this show, and has the most pathetic sounding voice ever. It is hard to watch these bitches treat it like shit.

Naruto: I know, a lot of people like it, and I used to like it. Keyword 'used to'. You know why? Because they tell us that the ENTIRE village used to abuse Naruto for something he couldn't control. Also, Hinata is...painfully accepting of her awful family. Those are the two things that make me hate this show, because they never consider these two things a big enough problem to have Hinata and Naruto at least bite back against it.

Yu Gi Oh Zexal: Johnny Test ego, Patrick's stupidity, Whitey's voice, and no dueling skills at all, that describes the main character, Yuma. It is a horrible blemish on the Yu Gi Oh franchise, and came out after the awesome 5D's. Also, "Shark", "Bronk", and "Flip"? What the hell kind of dubbed names are those?
If anyone is interested in seeing some of the fanfictions I didn't put on here, like my WWE crossovers, my Simpsons and Bob's Burgers crossover, a couple of Gravity Falls fanfictions, and more, please click the link below;

www.fanfiction.net/~friendlywe…

Feel free to let me know if you liked the fanfics or not. I really do hope you like them.
Peach Girl: Dumb! Stupid! Moronic! So, here's the plot; a girl pretends to be friends with this other girl to spread rumors about her. OK, so why be friends with her? You don't need to be friends with someone to spread shit about them. All you need is their name. Also, is the entire school made of idiots, that they would believe something like this. Also, why doesn't the victim do anything? It also looks really ugly to me, and makes me hate romantic stuff. All the characters are one note, and some of them are named after characters in Evangelion.

Michiko to Hatchin: The plot goes from A to B to B to B to B to B to B to C. They have some development in the first couple of episodes, but forget about that completely for 24 episodes, and is turned into a glorified babysitting comedy, even with the horrendous abuse one of the characters suffered. The ending is also shit. I don't want to spoil it, but...it makes the entre adventure pointless.

Pani Poni Dash: It's OK for the first two episodes, but the characters grate on you, and they do the same thing in every episode; "Hey! Look at these different personalities! Look at them argue! Isn't it hilarious!? Well, we hope you think so, because EVERY episode is like this!" Also, the theme song is annoyingly trippy. And, there's an ugly looking bunny that is basically the Meg Griffin of this show, and has the most pathetic sounding voice ever. It is hard to watch these bitches treat it like shit.

Naruto: I know, a lot of people like it, and I used to like it. Keyword 'used to'. You know why? Because they tell us that the ENTIRE village used to abuse Naruto for something he couldn't control. Also, Hinata is...painfully accepting of her awful family. Those are the two things that make me hate this show, because they never consider these two things a big enough problem to have Hinata and Naruto at least bite back against it.

Yu Gi Oh Zexal: Johnny Test ego, Patrick's stupidity, Whitey's voice, and no dueling skills at all, that describes the main character, Yuma. It is a horrible blemish on the Yu Gi Oh franchise, and came out after the awesome 5D's. Also, "Shark", "Bronk", and "Flip"? What the hell kind of dubbed names are those?

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DO NOT THANK ME FOR ANYTHING. IF YOU WANT TO THANK ME, LOOK AT MY WORK. I WOULD APPRECIATE THAT A LOT MORE THAN JUST THANKING ME FOR SOMETHING. PLEASE, UNLESS THERE IS SOMETHING IMPORTANT YOU WANT TO TELL ME, DO NOT THANK ME.

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Thanks for the comment! It means a lot! :D
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LotCMarluxiaplz Featured By Owner 5 days ago
Hey, what was your favorite era of WWF/WWE?
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Ruthless Aggression. Most of my favorite matches and storylines that've happened within that era. The PG era is my least favorite if you're wondering. What about you?
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I'd say Ruthless Aggression too, the storylines and matches and superstars seemed better to me. Haven't seen much of the Attitude Era and PG just isn't as good as the RE era.
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3 days....
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Thanks for faving the BRC logo!
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Doing a Q and A. Feel free to say questions in the journal.

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